I saw you today
I think you saw me too
I remembered you today
Did you remember me too?
I held you again
In the palm of my memory
I saw you again
In my arms temporarily
I saw you today
And it wasn’t enough
I held you again
But my nerves gave up
I saw you today
And I turned quickly away
Before the sunshine of our past
Met the light of today
Feedback required – i think this leads into a conclusion too fast. i’d like to build on the feeling from the second verse before killing the poem. Thoughts?
conceal my smile
so you wont know
kill my high
in case it shows
not telling my friends
coz
they’d want to know,
such a sinister plot
my soul wants to sow
just to make it last
make it grow
i dont want it released
in case it blows
this can’t be revealed
that’s how it ends
you know?
Updated after consultationwith a friend (who is also a budding writer) 17/11/11
conceal my smile
so you wont know
kill my high
in case it shows
not telling my friends
coz
they’d want to know
such a sinister plot
my soul wants to sow
just to make it last
make it grow
i dont want it released
in case it blows
can my heart handle this
does she know how it goes?
when you steal a smile
and the feeling grows
till it fills up wide
coz it fills up slow
can you pick the signs
can you tell
do you know?
there’s a spring in my step
a new bounce in my flow
i’m killin this prose
coz my heart wants to show
all the ways i’m affected
i’m eager
you know?
but it can’t be revealed
that’ll end this
no!
not it can’t be shown
that’s how it ends
you know.
